To whom it may concern:
I am writing in regards to a point I would like to be brought before the Olympic Committee. I am very passionate about the following subject and I would hope that you would give all the attention you can to this suggestion.
The Olympics are an incredible showcase of sportsmanship and bonding between all the nations of the world. Each sporting event is meant to bring nations closer and make friendships stronger. I am of the position that the sport of Ultimate, commonly called Ultimate Frisbee, should be added to the vast list of sporting events that create this great sporting showcase. Ultimate should be added because it is a very real and challenging sport of serious athleticism, it fits flawlessly into the beliefs of the Olympics with its Spirit of the Game officiating, and it has a following throughout the whole world.
Ultimate was invented in 1968 by a group of High School students at Columbia High School in New Jersey. Ever since establishing the official rules in the early 1970's, Ultimate has grown in popularity and sophistication. It is a sport of high endurance and fast-pace action. It involves a flying disc, two teams of seven players each, and a field similar in size to an American football field. It combines the endurance of soccer and the movement of football, however, it is unlike any other sport on earth. On every level of play, Ultimate is self-officiated. This is what makes the sport most unique. Players are expected to abide by the rules and keep the Spirit of the Game alive. This exciting, one-of-a-kind sport would be a fantastic addition to the list of Olympic sports.
Also, please do not think that this sport is only popular in small towns, or even in America alone. Today, the sport of Ultimate is played in 42 countries worldwide, with hundreds of thousands of athletes participating. It is not unique to America and is sure to be a favorite by spectators around the world. The game is fast-paced and simple enough to be enjoyed by those of all ages and background. The sport is also simple to learn, however, it is hard to master - with its multitude of throws and strategies adding to the complexity and attractiveness of the sport. Everyone who watches or participates in this sport is an instant fan. This sport will no doubt only add to the worldwide fervor of the Olympic Games.
Finally, the last point I wish to share in favor of the addition of Ultimate to the Olympic games, is the Spirit of the Game. As mentioned early the entire sport on every level is governed by self-officiating. The theory of the Spirit of the Game is, "Ultimate relies upon a spirit of sportsmanship that places the responsibility for fair play on the player. Highly competitive play is encouraged, but never at the expense of mutual respect among competitors, adherence to the agreed upon rules, or the basic joy of play." (USA Ultimate) This goes hand-in-hand with the basic beliefs of the Olympic games: "To encourage and support the promotion of ethics in sport as well as education of youth through sport and to dedicate its efforts to ensuring that, in sport, the spirit of fair play prevails and violence is banned;" (IOC) As you can see, Ultimate, more than any other sport, portrays what it means to be an Olympic athlete: enjoying the bonds of competition, never at the expense of sportsmanship. Therefore, it is obvious that Ultimate would fit flawlessly into the line-up of current Olympic sports.
In conclusion, there is perhaps no other sport in existence that deserves more fully to be a part of the Olympic games. Ultimate has a strong argument with its unmatched competitive nature and challenging nature, world-wide participant base, and its Spirit of the Game ideology. This is no doubt worth all you consideration. I thank you for reading and hope to hear back from you. I respect your decision regardless of what it is.
I'm sold. There are some minor grammatical mistakes that you might want to fix, though.
ReplyDeleteI love ultimate (though I'm really bad at it)! Great job adding the "I respect your decision" bit at the end. Just a few nitpicks: a lot of your commas need to be semicolons. Also, it'll strengthen your case if you can provide the sources for your statistics of popularity (42 countries, etc.) and decrease the work the reader will have to do if they want to verify that. You might want to go through and get rid of any extra words. Great paper overall, you do a good job of covering not only the popularity and history, but also the spirit and athleticism of the sport.
ReplyDeleteI agree, I might want to condense this to make it more powerful. It kind of drones on at times. I want the person to feel like they've played the sport after reading this email and I don't think I've done that. I also need to break this into paragraphs.
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